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True-crime shows are watched by many people, however, according to Dr. Amanda Vicary, a psychology professor, “women are more drawn to true crime than men.” This is because women have a “driveto survive”. They feel that by watching such programs, they may learn some techniques that can help them if they were to find themselves in such a situation. They also learn some signs on how to spot a possible killer. Dr. Sharon Packer, a psychiatrist, says that “watching, listening to, or reading about real crimes could be like a dress rehearsal.” I must admit that as a woman, I do pay attention to the details of the crimes I watch. I observe where the crimes take place and how they happen. For example, a lot of perpetrators enter through doors and windows that have been left open. I find myself checking my windows and doors every night before going to bed. I have also become very aware of my surroundings therefore if I am walking home by myself, I don’t put my earphones in so I can be mindful of what’s happening around be.
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Corey Parker, a 25-year-old woman, was attending college in Jacksonville, Florida, where she worked part-time as a waitress. During the Thanksgiving holiday of her junior year, she did not show up for work and her colleagues began to worry and believed something was wrong. A cook from her work went to her apartment and found that it was locked so he looked inside through her window. He saw her on the bed, naked and dead. Her whole body was covered in blood as if she was painted. There was blood spattered all over the walls, some blood still dripping. She had been stabbed 101 times. I felt shivers run down my spine but I continue to watch. I turned to check the time and saw it was 1:00 am and I was on my 8thepisode of Forensics Files. I can’t help but think to myself why am I watching this and why can’t I stop?
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